Johnny’s letter 2 abby
Dear Abby,
Until just a few days ago I was one of the most popular boys in my house, but suddenly a life changing incidence happened and I lost everything. Well, I was working on my steel project just when the melted steel started pouring out of the cracked crucible. I didn’t know the crucible was cracked until I felt the boiling steel on my bare hands. But it was too late. My hand was already crumpled up and burned. We called a nearby mid-wife for help but she couldn’t do much. Since that day on my hand has been this way. It’s totally deformed and now useless. I don’t know what to do. I can’t even work as a silversmith anymore. My life has taken an unexpected turn. I see no future. Please give me some advice. I’m in desperate need of your help.
-Johnny Tremain
Dear Johnny,
I understand your feelings but you need to realize that life moves on. Don’t forget that there are so many other people in this world who have disabilities. There lives are moving on, yours will to. Just because you can’t be a silversmith anymore doesn’t mean that you can’t become something else. I’m sure there’s something else you can do. And if you believe in yourself then nothing can stop you from reaching the peaks of success.
- Abby
November 3, 2007 at 7:48 pm
Nice Mariam!
Nice descriptive words you have used to write up your letter! Keep up the good work. Also when you wrote in your second paragraph first sentence “I understand your feelings but you need to realize that life moves on.” instead of the word moves put in a more descriptive word
November 4, 2007 at 2:27 pm
I can see that you understood the event of the story by the way you explain it as your own experience. Even though it was short, you summed it up in a pretty good and simple letter explaining how you injured your hand and your feelings of how you should live the rest of your life. I could understand the process and the hard times that you went through by the way you explain about it as your own life story. Like teachers say, it is not the quantity that matters, it is the quality. Good job! I love your writing style!!!!!!!!!!
Nice Job!
Estelle
November 5, 2007 at 4:44 pm
heyy…thnx…and ya thnx 4 the helpfull suggestionz abdullah!!!!
November 5, 2007 at 6:33 pm
Hey Mariam,
Great job. This is nicely done. You have good word choice and all the 6+1 traits. I was able to picture this response. I was able to feel what you were saying. I can tell that you have applied a great amount effort in to your work. Keep up the great work.
Your Friend/Classmate
Adnan Hussaini
January 6, 2008 at 11:40 pm
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January 6, 2008 at 11:40 pm
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January 7, 2008 at 11:07 am
lol….bichara